Who died up there?

On its front page today, a prominent daily reported the death of a trekker. He died of a heart attack barely 500 meters from his destination.

This is how the report ended: “(The) body was brought down by his fellow trekkers along with the police.” The sentence had the person’s name in place of (the).

Do you get this feeling there is something wrong with that sentence?

Let us try three different versions of that sentence.

“(The) body was brought down by his fellow trekkers and the police.”

“His fellow trekkers along with the police brought down (the) body.”

“The police and his fellow trekkers brought (the) body down.”

Which version says it best, with no room for confusion?

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